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Very creative but stressful. It’s very hard for me to read this kind of article. Though you showed your artistic skills here, what is important is the READABILITY of the content… Please enlarge the size of the text next time…
I like your creativity, but just like what Alfrick said, readers don’t understand some part of your article maybe because of the font type as well as the background. It’s nice that you have unique ways to present your article in OJ, however, you should always remember that you’re not writing for your self but for your readers. 🙂
your topic was very nice. the font that you used was also good because it somewhat captured the cheesiness of your artilcle. However, your background was kinda off. make sure that your article is readable so that people can enjoy your article more
Nash De Leon
I think others would find difficulty reading your article. Not because it is an article but because of the color of the background in which the text is imposed on. I felt like your article lacked examples or experiences. It was just simply a discussion of your ideas about chances. It felt like a love adviser when I was reading it. Your article was not able to illicit some reactions from me unlike the others that I have read. It would have been better if you used other pictures because the repetition of the heart image makes it look dull despite the color.
Although your article sounds romantic, upon reading, it’s not. You tackle a somehow broad aspect of second chance of love which more likely required some examples. I like your personal ideas about being single or being in the relationship but still need to have supporting ideas to make the article more enticing to read. And speaking of enticing, I appreciate your creativity but it somehow sacrifice the readability of it.
Also avoid repeating sentences. Rephrase them if possible.
Your grade is 90.
Your article is cute in a way that it talks about young love and second chances. Its content was free-flowing and I was hooked while reading your article. On the other hand, I had to squint my eyes so that I could see the text clearly. I hope that you also observe color patterns that will suit the background of your article. Congrats 🙂
Your grade is 90 🙂
Beside of the lovely layout that you did, I also like the fact that you had emphasize the meaning of second chance.
I was just confused on the transition you made in your article, because it seems that you leave us hanging about the different scenario during valentines day (on your first two paragraphs) and then you suddenly ask us on what will we do if we have separation with our love ones (on your third paragraph). I think that you could make it clear to us if you had just put a nice transition sentence in that particular paragraph.
Anyway, I still love the fact that to you make us see the essence of second chance in a more realistic perception. nice job. (90)
honestly spoeaking i had a hard time getting the message tyou want to communicate with..i dong know if this is a poem or what since its not really readable for me.
But I want to commend you for still being creative and different!
your grade is 88.
very good layout which makes one interested to read.
your grade is 87
I find your article interesting. I love how you played with some words and ideas. I am one of those singles out there this February but honestly, I don’t mind it. haha! Giving chances is like taking another risk, it is either you get hurt again, or be happy eternally. It is okay at least you’ll have no regrets.
Good article. You have minimal errors which I think you could change and improve. Also, as what they’ve said the text is quite small and blurred.
the ideas on your article is there but seriously I don’t find it readable.
Great layout very creative but consider the readability of your piece.
grade 90 🙂
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